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Rape
written by bloody_tears_girl03:38 AM 3/28/05i trusted you
i trusted your friend
way too many times
i fell for you
but all you diid was beat me
worse than that rape me
you left me with so much pain
matt, how could you do this to me?
thinking back to when you touched me
makes me wanna puke
how come no one understands
about how much hurt i have inside?
you took away my inocence
something you cant give back
now i wanna take something from you
that i cant give back
i wanna take your life away |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by (guest) (3-28-2005 - 04:04 AM)
| i love your poem and i think i kno u |
by (guest) (3-28-2005 - 07:51 AM)
| i just love it and i know how u feel. its so B-E-A-Utiful |
by DarkMousy (3-28-2005 - 06:18 PM)
| I agree with your ending. He doesnt Deserve you or his own life. I say he can burn in the depths of Hell for what he did. Noone has that right to do something like that. I hate Matt now. |
by .:dumbasssk8r:. (3-29-2005 - 03:00 AM)
| i love it its soo beautiful the way it blends and u made something so horrible so beautiful i love it. u should enter it in a poetry contest cuz u have a tallent. |
by bloody_tears_girl (3-29-2005 - 04:19 AM)
| wow thnx everbody, and just so u know, he got his ass beat by 3 different guys. |
by The Black Halo (3-30-2005 - 12:18 PM)
| Your last comment proves he didn't rape you. Someone that was raped would never talk like that, about the person that done it. Also, most people don't actually know who raped them. |
by MoodPhilosophy (3-30-2005 - 05:11 PM)
| This poem could do very well without that idiotic line "makes me wanna puke". "Wanna" and "puke" are stupid enough words on their own, no need to place them together in a phrase. And you use "wanna" three times in your poem... i hope you realize the foremost way to sound like you don't know what you're doing is by using incorrect words like that. Other than that the poem isn't so bad. Just change "wanna" to "want to", "inocence" to "innocence", and "cant" to "can't" or "cannot".
-Uli |
by bloody_tears_girl (3-30-2005 - 10:28 PM)
| this is to ethereia, first off, when i was 13, i was raped by my ex, who in fact was beat up for it. how does my last comment prove i wasn't? you probably have no idea how it feels to go through something like that. |
by The Black Halo (3-31-2005 - 12:24 PM)
| Heh. You have no idea. Dumb ass. |
by bloody_tears_girl (3-31-2005 - 11:17 PM)
| and neither do you, asshole. |
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