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» Poem: Goodbye Lullaby(suicide kinda)
Goodbye Lullaby(suicide kinda)
written by Lovely_Suicide
10:55 AM 11/3/04
Goodbye, Go back to sleep
I won't be here when you wake up
Goodbye, Go back to sleep
Bloody wrists is all you will see
Goodbye, Go back to sleep
A dead body on a bed
Goodbye, Go back to sleep
I won't be breathing
Goodbye, Go back to sleep
Close your eyes
Goodbye, Go back to sleep....


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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
i wrote this in my notepad though i'd share it cuz i like it

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» Comments / Feedback
by hanna_the_used (11-3-2004 - 12:43 PM)
i love it. so deep,so dark. sleep is the deepest darkest moment of ones life,right next to death. context used well

by hanna_the_used (11-3-2004 - 12:44 PM)
i love it. so deep,so dark. sleep is the deepest darkest moment of ones life,right next to death. context used well

by (anonymous) (11-3-2004 - 04:02 PM)
This would be better if you changed the refrain to "yeah yeah yeah."

by RebelYell (11-3-2004 - 04:14 PM)
Really good. Very dark.

by (anonymous) (11-3-2004 - 07:48 PM)
this is weak

by (anonymous) (11-6-2004 - 02:41 AM)
good but not great i know that ir you try just a tiny bit harder you'll make a great poem :)

by jodedwar (11-6-2004 - 04:19 PM)
i also like this peom, i love lullaby's being used in darker ways.

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